My camera move continues into the apartment. The clip turned out to be a bit pale for some reason (sorry), but I hope that you can see what I meant to do.
I think that this man should definitely put down his arms before the camera moves (right now he's just frozen - which is a bit unnatural...). I'll try to fix this soon.
I'm pretty happy with how this is going, but I need a little help with the next few lines. Since I've decided not to go with the animatic on this part (in the animatic you saw them going into the apartment, now you are moving in the apartment), one transition needs to be redone, so hopefully we can figure out a way to solve it.
The next line is: "Sometimes you had to be very quiet there, when a stranger came to the apartment..."
I'm thinking of showing them standing in the room. Instead of showing the stranger, I'd rather show them thinking about that danger (maybe with a few cuts - to show a sort of panic). Now there is the missing link, because the line after this is about her father. In the animatic the stranger became a suit that became the father. Now when there is no stranger, I need to think of a creative way to get to him.
Sorry if this is kind of hard to follow... especially without the animatic.
Ideas would be great!